Writing Comp

[Fizzy]

This is a monthly competition to keep you occupied whilst you wait for some one to reply or if no one's on. You just post your first chapter bellow and I'll judge them. The winner gets a personalised avvy and a banner for their siggy and everyone who enters gets a free personalised avvy.


This Month's Inspiration Is:

YOU CHOOSE MONTH
CHOOSE WHAT YOU WRITE ABOUT

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Wild Thing

Sydney stood in the middle of the arena listening to the winds of December howl. The lesson was teaching riders how to trot and so far it was going pretty well. She kept one eye on a student who was riding Chico, a high spirited stallion who spooked easily. Glancing up worriedly at the sky she sighed "Okay everyone dismount and lead your horses back to the barn after you cool them off" Sydney said with one more look out the window. She approached the girl riding Chico, "I'll deal with him you can go help someone else" she said.

Chico had spooked earlier before the lesson and Sydney was in no mood to deal with it again. She led the black stud into cross ties and began to groom him. He obediently picked up his hoof so Sydney could pick it. As he set it on a girl appeared, Sydney led him back to his stall and gave her best friend a hug. Rae grinned then moved over to Chico "Jacob asked me- " she began before she was interrupted by Zane, a stable hand. "Storm. Horse. Wild. Catch." he panted pointing toward the mare pasture. I looked out and saw a wild horse running trying to get into the mare pasture. "Crap." Rae said grabbing some western tack and tacking up our horses quickly. I grabbed a rope and spurred my horse into action.

The bay horse I rode streched out his legs, he went over ground easily. The sky rumbled then fell silent, ahead ran a flaxen stallion. His tail trailed behind him as he loped around the pen. Without realizing it I swirled the rope over my head and let it fly. The noose caught around his head and I backed up my horse. "C'mon pretty. Come quietly" I whispered to the stag in front of me. "Woah there boy." Rae cooed as her lasso also caught around the mighty neck of the flaxen. As we half led half dragged the stallion towards the round pen I looked him over, scars decorated his barrel and the way he walked made them look like badges of honor.


Days later, after food and water the stallion filled out nicely. I had groomed him which was a lot more complicated then it looked. He was part TB and probaly had a bit of mustang in him. When I put a saddle on him, he didn't buck or rear, he took the bridal angrly but didn't fight. When I mounted him I remember flying through the air and hitting the side of the arena.


I opened my eyesand looked around, everything was white and the smell was... funny. A lady approached me and began to fill cups with pills. "take these for the headache" she said shoving a cup full of neon colored pills at me. As I choked them down "Where am I?" I asked looking around then regreting it as my head throbbed. "The hosipital" called a docter when he came inside my room examining my head. "You took a nasty fall off a horse" he added. I closed my eyes and fell asleep once agian.

Loud voices filled my head "We want to see our daughter" cried an older ladies voice, "Ma'am we can't let you in." called the nurse as my parents walked in to my room. "Mother dear, please shut up" I growled at my mom. Her bleach blond hair wobbled as she ran towards me. "Why did you ride that dangerous horse, couldn't you have your little poor friend ride it?" she asked looking at Rae with hate in her eyes. Yep, thats my mother a spoiled rich old lady. Sadly I was related to her. "Get her out of here please" I pleaded with my father, he nodded and led my mother out of the bleached room.


I sighed and fell back into the stiff pillows. Wow, I thought, silence could be so loud. The nurse's pills had made me drowsy and that was good.

Notes: this is random thing i came up with xD

[kmsnead]

A Sumer Dream

I walked into the fair stable I had been waiting all year for today, today was the day I would get to do my first show with my beloved horse Marya, as I walk towards his stall I hear him nicker lightly to me, "hey boy," I say happily rapping my arms around his neck, and then he nudged me, I laugh and pull out the little peace of chocalot for him "see told ya you wouldn't forget you" I said smiling and hugging him again, I ran and got my new western show saddle sitting it on the rack and opening his stall I slid in, "hey boy you ready show them your as good as any ol' horse?" I asked him and he whinnied and whipped his head, "that's my boy" I say patting him on the neck as I tighten girth and then I get my bridle, when I offer him the bit he refuses to take it, of course he always does, I jerk his halter, "Marya knock it off!" I snap at him and he lowers his head and takes the bit, I give a quick scratch between the ears, "good boy good boy" I say in a low voice to him and lead him out of the stall the warm up pen.

I walk him into the warming up arena, I can feel him flexing and getting ancee like he always did when he was rode around other horses, I walk for about ten minuets before moving him to a jog, when I felt him flex and collect his stride I move him into a lope, he does nicely and when I feel him relax and collect again, I slow him down and dismount and lead him to the showing ring with all the other riders, when we reach the gate we all mount up again, and walk an even long stride into the arena ready to show...

As we walk around the arena I hear the announcer call "LOPE!" and we all move into nice smooth Lope, I could feel his muscles ripping under me, I moved with his every stride, "JOG!" the announcer called and I leaned back pulled in the rains, he moved down to a nice and easy Jog, I make sure to keep my back totally straight, my hand on my hip, and hold the rains right above the horn, we moved threw the gates for about thirty minuets, "LINE UP" the announcer called and we all lined up to see who would place and who would not, the judges walked along the line of horses, checking all their bits to make sure they were legal bits, and then the first place winner was called "number Fifteen" he called and the big black Thoroughbred stepped forward, "number Eighteen" he called and the chestnut overo stepped forward, I was smiling brightly it didn't look like I was gonna place but oh well it was just fun riding here, "number twenty" he called and kicked Marya to step forward, taking my third place ribbon, I was smiling as wide as the cat that swallowed the canary, and after the annulments were done, we left the arena in a even line at a even walk.

I work Marya out after our ride in Western Pleasure, it wouldn't be long before the barrel racing show, and I needed to refresh him for the long and fast ride a head of us, as I worked him, I heard the call for Barrel Racing to start I turn Marya and we trot to the arena ready for the show, I wait till number fifteen is called and then I line up and then get Marya into a full blown gallop, as we break free I can feel Marya's heart pounding, and I can hear my Heart beating in my chest, I feel my body tense and his tighten as we turn around the first barrel, as we spin around the barrel and dart for the next one, it as if we are going slow motion, I pull myself up in the saddle pushed into his side making him spin a sharp turn, as I finish the turn I kick him into a full blown gallop he lunged forward and pushed himself faster then I thought passable, he went into over drive spinning faster then I ever felt, I could feel his heart pounding hard and my heart beating so loud I thought everyone could hear it, as we ran across the finish line I heard them announce the winner, "and its McKayla Snead on Espirt De Marya!" they said and I threw back my head back "Thank you God," I say to the heavens smiling as wide as life can be, and then hugging Marya I whisper to him "you were great boy," I said to him and sitting back up in the saddle, 'and God I give you the glory' I think in my head, and trotting to the stable to cool him out, as I work him I feel so happy and Marya whips his head and pulled at the bit "easy boy" I say pulling him down to a walk, after I was done cooling him out I dismount and start grooming him, I pick out his feet and wipe down his legs, and scrape his body off with the sweat scraper, I brush him out with the curry comb, then the body brush and then I brush out his mane and tail, "hey you look good boy" I say and he whips his head and nickers lightly to me, "yeah yeah here ya go" I say handing him a peace of his favorite treat, "you like that don't you boy" I said laughing at him as he licked at my hand, I hug him again "I love you boy, now you ready to show what you can do in the jumping ring?" I asked him and he whipped his and stomped his foot, "OK let's do it" I said smiling and running to the tack room to get my English tack...

I come back and slip into the stall with my saddle I slid it onto Marya's back and tighten the girth witch he doesn't do anything but stand still "good boy" I said as I stroked his neck, I slipped the bit into his mouth this time with no fight from him, "good boy" I said stroking his face, and walking out of the stall I head for the Jumping Ring, right outside of it I mount up ready to do my first show jumping show, I lean down to whisper into her ear, "OK boy let's show em'" I say to him and watch him whip his head, I smile and push him into a canter, as we approach the first jump I relax and when he flew over the jump I felt as if there was nothing else in the world but me and him, as we land I barley feel it, its like a little thump on the ground, I lean back and pull him to a collected canter as I weave around the jumps to the next jump as we soar over it I feel like never coming down, I jump over all the other jumps, Marya jumping and soaring like they were nothing, I heard a poll fall to the ground but I didn't care this was the best feeling in the world to me, as me and the other jumper line up and wait for the places to be called the black Thoroughbred won first, and then a black and white paint won second and I won third witch was a lot better then I thought I would, "that was great boy we'll get'em next time," I said smiling and hugging him before walking him over to the barn where I untacked him and groomed him out again...

I walked out to my truck and trailer it was time to take Marya home, I put my groom box, show cloths, and tack in the small tack room in the trailer, I went back and got Marya "hey boy you ready to go home?" I asked him and he snorted when he saw the trailer he loved going for a ride in the trailers, "OK boy loud up" I said stepping up into the trailer and letting Marya hope into the trailer, I locked the divider over him and tied the lead rope lightly to the ring, "OK let's get home" I said hopping out of the trailer and closing the trailer door, I walked around and hopped into the truck, as I pull out I can't stop thinking about the day I had, it was one of the greatest days of my life, I see the front gate to my family's farm and pulled in I parked by the first stable that one where we kept the gelding...

I open the trailer door "hey Marya were home" I said in a happy voice it was good to be home with him again we had stayed at the fair all week, training and it was good to finally be home, I walk into the trailer and get him out, "let's go say Hi to all your friends and brag" I said laughing, when we get into the Stable he let's out a loud whinny, "yeah guys he kicked butt today" I said smiling and laughing at my self, I loved my boy, he was such a show off some times, "well now if your done showing off let's get you into a stall OK?" I asked him and he pranced around me, I shack my head doing stuff in the arena always made him hyper, I find the stall that said Espirt De Marya on it, "home sweet home" I said letting him into the stall he circled and neighed a few times I laughed "that's my boy always over dramatic" I say laughing, at him as he lays down and rolls in the hay, I rolled my eyes at him tomorrow I would take him out for a nice long trial ride, I run up the house and get ready for dinner, first taking a nice long shower, then dressing in my normal skinny jeans and tight tank top shirt, I run I down the kitchen my mom is gone for the day and dad is in town at work and won't be back till late, I grab a bag of chips and sit down to watch Second Chances I hadn't seen the movie in years but it was one of my favorites, after watching about three other movies on TV I head up to bed I had had a long day and was ready for a nice long nap and fell asleep as soon as my head hit the pillow...

I ran down to the barn about five thirty in the morning to look after Marya, I whistled and heard all the gelding neigh to greet me "yeah I missed you guys too," I say looking in on every one, and then I got to Marya "hey how bout' a nice long gallop in the field?" I asked putting the bridle on him and and take him to the pasture, I swing up on to his back and kick him into a full gallop, there was nothing like running into the sun raise bare back at a full speed gallop, I felt so free and wild, as if I was riding the wind, I leaned over his neck "faster" I whispered and he went lower to the ground, he ran so fast I thought I would fly off of his back but I clung to him like a life boat, "go now!" I say to him and loud voice and he soars over a fallen tree whipping his head when he landed and taking off again at a high speed low to the ground gallop, "good boy let's take it easy now' I said and pulled on his rains a little and he slowed to a fast canter, when we get to the highest hill, he stops "up boy" I say and he goes up in a rear, we were swatted in the sun raise, I look into the sky "Thank you god for Marya I don't know what I would do without him" I said this is where I came every day to thank God for my wonderful one of a kind horse.

[Fizzy]

hehe lol XD we got some competition on now!
yeh, they both really good tho XD

[Fizzy]

They both seem to be like a short story insteaad of a chapter but u still got a few weeks to check it through thoroughly and make it different, change it.